Feedback:
This week we are going to try a third crack at my elevator pitch. Based on the feedback, it was suggested I dress up to make it more professional and I add some more detail to interest the customer more. People loved my enthusiasm so I tried to maintain that in this video.Changes:
Based on my feedback I dressed up to make it seem more professional. I also tried to go in more depth about my company and stay away from generalizations. I also tried to use some examples and really sell my company instead of just informing you of what it is.
Let me know what you think!
Travis, your enthusiasm in this pitch is great! I haven't seen any other pitches that have as much enthusiasm as you. You have a great idea and have a very detailed plan of how this would operate. As far as your pitch is concerned it seemed like there was a lot of information that you tried to fit in so perhaps consolidating that information to the key points would be beneficial. I think that would also help you to slow down in terms of how fast you were talking. You had lots of good information maybe just a little less would make it seem not so overwhelming as a listener. I liked that you dressed professionally and really seemed invested in your product! You can check out my pitch here (it includes an elevator pitch outtake video as well!): http://buschuf.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-no-3-includes-outtake.html
ReplyDeleteI can certainly see a lot of potential for your business idea. This is particularly useful for special occasions whether, as you said, it's a job interview, or if it's a wedding, a business meeting, etc. Many people aren't able to afford the luxuries of a watch and sometimes it's necessary to 'dress the part', especially in the instance if you're trying to land an important sale. You did a good job presenting your idea. Being that your business idea is based around luxury it's definitely good you dressed up for the elevator pitch. You do seem highly enthusiastic, it's great that you looked straight at the camera. Great job! I missed the deadline for this assignment so I do not have a link to share with you.
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